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Friday, 1 August 2014

Walt: show don't Tell 

A few day's ago we had to show not tell an emotion in our writing. We focused on writing in the third person.  Can you guess how im feeling?

his head was cold that was going to blow.his body was  shaking and shivering he could not move that his standing like a stone that was deep-frozen have one more word.what he was thinking about wolf in his mind that was eating his dad & mum.but he thought that his friend was there to  help him. then he was crying that made the frozen  gone.but he screamed  to his mum.he  run back home..no one helped him no more,they where gone.it was no person to save him.he was stuck in a ] house with no way out.